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Thank you We sneak in and here's your shmoop du

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jour brought to you by pediatricians though the receptionist will

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not give you a lollipop that's our perception that she's

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being if any come on be nice All right my

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plans for the future for skimming when i graduate medicine

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has become doctors long good thing this gal is not

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to be a writer alright in sentence Five maria wants

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to say that she would attend the best college that

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except sir but scholarship money will be a factor in

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her decision to which of the following revisions best accomplishes

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that purpose and here's a potential answers shmoop Well so

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we need a sentence that gives us the low down

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on maria's college selection priorities Here's a big sense i

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will attend the best one i get accepted to grammar

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police please and we'll of course consider the receipt of

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scholarship money too Well basically she wants to go to

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the best place that accepts her but she's also going

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to take into account the scholarship money offered we recommend

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she take that scholarship money into serious accounts Loans will

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eat our souls Trust us people it's gonna be over

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don't even bother All right Wilby doesn't work because it

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makes it sound like maria's on ly taking scholarship money

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into consideration Maybe she should be doing that But she's

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not again Student loans will eat our souls get them

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out of here See doesn't work because it's phrased kind

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of awkwardly it makes it sort of sound like scholarship

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money is the most important thing to maria minutes says

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she'll only go to the one that gives her the

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most money If it's the best is too convoluted Next

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place is the closest so far because it balances maria's

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priorities But it's really wordy an awkward and like this

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time for all that next choice is the right answer

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because it clearly communicates maria's priorities We have a joke

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that might help maria adjust her priorities though Here you

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go knock knock who's there student loans student loans What

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my soul my soul yeah really your soul here's like

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be able to get all the money you borrow your

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promising to pay back They don't even bother with ketchup

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