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TSI Writing: For Pottery's Sake, Revise This Sentence 25 Views
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Think about how you would rewrite the following sentences according to the directions given, and then choose the best answer for each. Keep in mind that your revision should not change the meaning of the original sentence.
After glazing the vase
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- 00:03
Okay see writing editing people Last question for you in
- 00:07
the hole Siri's here on writing Thie artist glazed the
- 00:10
vase and then fired it in the kiln We're not
- 00:14
like donald's frump reality show Stop okay after glazing the
- 00:18
vase What And see a comma right there Well who
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- 00:28
this sense reminds us a visiting our local paint your
- 00:31
own pottery cafe On our last visit we picked out
- 00:34
a mug painted a super groovy feeling shmoop e design
- 00:37
on it and finally put our work of art into
- 00:39
the kiln Well the original sentence in this question expresses
- 00:42
the same sequence and the re written sentence needs to
- 00:45
as well so here's the trick after is already given
- 00:49
at the beginning of the re written sentence As a
- 00:51
result we don't need to include the additional sequence word
- 00:54
then as the first three choices dio Instead we can
- 00:58
go straight to the subject of the sentence right there
- 01:01
The complete rewritten sentence then will read After glazing the
- 01:05
vase the artist fired it in the kiln right like
- 01:09
the apprentice Remember that when we're done we're shmoop who
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