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PSAT 1.10 Writing Narrative Walkthrough. How would you change the underlined portion, if at all?

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PSAT 1.15 Writing Narrative Walkthrough. How would you change the underlined portion, if at all?

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Thank you We sneak and here's your shmoop du jour

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brought to you by the museum of modern art It's

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the only place where someone might vandalize some of the

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artwork and no one would notice All right check the

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passage Sorry we that we love modern art but some

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of it just like that soup can thing i don't

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get All right How would you change the underlying portion

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below If it all Yes i know i'm a philistine

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his brothers who were involved in founding museum on our

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new york What entrench an experimental buys in the right

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talking like a snooty new yorker there all right And

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here potential answers It was quite lovely all right We'll

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only once in our lives have we ever heard of

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sentence this long without a single comma or other punctuation

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And that was when a car salesman tried to sell

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us the latest prius in under thirty seconds without taking

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a breath It wasn't pretty so as much as the

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original sentence just spits it all out and lets us

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get on with our day We have a feeling there's

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probably something missing here since it's rockefeller's brothers who were

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involved in founding the museum We're probably going to need

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to find a way to segment that bit off from

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the rest of the sentence unless banks he came along

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and manually remove the commas to make some sort of

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statement right No banks Option c has decided to go

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with parentheses A valiant effort but wrong parentheses can be

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used to present information is an afterthought But the content

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here is providing valuable information that describes the brothers and

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why there might be some bias there So we need

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to make the claws more of a focal point Go

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back to sleep Santa will wake you if we media

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option d also Separates the claws this time with dashes

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another good attempt but using dashes here is probably too

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jarring for the flow of the sentence which otherwise trucks

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along rather smoothly Let's call this one plan b in

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case nothing better comes along Ah yes answer Choice b

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hits it on the nose Commas worked perfectly to separate

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this non restrictive clause They make it clear that the

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line is in reference to the brothers while not cluttering

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the sentence or disrupting the tone or rhythm Plus they're

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forty percent off this week Only it's a win win

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