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Thank you We sneak And here's your shmoop du jour

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brought to you by spacewalks not to be confused with

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space runs which are well something totally new All right

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check out this Basset gemini for luna Walked in space

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with living in one Gus grissom Hey gus And exuberant

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Great Tremendous All right how would you change the underlined

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portion below if it all this thing right at the

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end of his space walk also called extra vehicular activity

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or e v a which had lasted for twenty minutes

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All right here Potential answers All right Okay All right

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Well we wonder if mr white was as excited after

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completing his space walk as michael jackson was every time

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he finished doing the moonwalk That's one happy pop star

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All right well what's the dealio here We're told to

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check out a portion of the passage and see if

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there's any clearer and more concise way toe word things

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let's Hope so Because at the end of a spacewalk

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also called extra vehicular activity or eva which had lasted

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twenty minutes is an absolute mouthful We know these guys

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are in the habit of recording every little detail of

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their missions But this is way tio am i This

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is neither the time nor place to get into other

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names for a spacewalk or what acronyms stand for We

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just want to know when he was exuberant We don't

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need his whole life story What about just changing it

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toe Finally like option b thinks we should do well

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it's definitely more concise but we're losing a lot of

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clarity here Finally what At the end of time the

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word just doesn't quite communicate that it was white's spacewalk

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that had him all giddy So let's keep looking Should

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we change it To see at the end of his

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twenty minutes spacewalk also called extra vehicular activity or e

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v a well deja vu This one is slightly different

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from option a it's been re ordered a bit but

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it's basically the same thing and still far too much

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info So sadly it's not going to be us and

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option c forever Well d on the other hand totally

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hits the mark after his twenty minutes bayswater boom it

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short and sweet and doesn't let any other nonsense get

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in the way Uh that one wasn't too bad In

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fact it was kind Of a space walk in the 00:02:08.318 --> [endTime] park Frank

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