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All right people more shmoop editing training If you want

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to apply for a job here it's from up editing

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our craft are fine writing This probably questioned us Have

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men with your resume You are considered the leading the

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following phrase to the sentence Be kept or delete it

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All right So the following phrases that after a fumble

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here i'll just read ok was the paragraph about people

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running late for shadow And i think i've got a

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final washington right after a little greeting from adam's present

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like moved about overlooking wall street So that's that how

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are we thinking about this rephrasing it Should we deleted

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or keep it Well actually kind of cool adam's fumbling

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and greeting and that sounds like kind of the opening

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to a sitcom you know like a like a big

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washington theory something that well though the thirty second vice

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president of the u s said that the vice presidency

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isn't worth quote a warm bucket of spit Yes he

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actually said that it's still worth knowing what our first

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vp was up to during the inauguration ceremony was love

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fumbling their plus this sentence both points backto adam's uncertainty

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over the vice presidential role and well it foreshadows the

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uncertain future the whole lot of fumbling in american politics

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This essay makes it sound like no one really knew

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what to do when it came to inaugurating a us

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president that's probably because that it had never been done

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before not because people were incompetent so well this clause

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doesn't sound like a dis toward adams So yeah that

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or a compliment directed at washington you know that the

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overall topic of the paragraph is the lead up to

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the oath of office And while this detail about the

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right hand man to leader of the entire country is

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relevant Yeah so keep it after a fumbled greeting from

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adam's Hopefully the offense will pick up the ball Keep 00:01:44.919 --> [endTime] running down Playing in a band

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