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Okay a city reading shmoop er's Here we go Four

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of eleven To improve the flow of the essay the

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author is considering adding the following sentence to the end

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of paragraph one Should the sentence be added the congress

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stipulated that each of the colony's contribute proportionally All right

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so let's see this is the end of paragraph one

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so it would go right here after a yeti at

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a congress issued two million dollars in bills on july

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twenty fifth congress hired twenty eight said this is the

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philadelphia to sign and number of the currency where they'd

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be a busy hand running all that So then the

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next sentence would be the congress stipulated that each of

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the colony's contribute proportionally So should they add that that's

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kind of weird like where the colonies come from You

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don't know Well because it raises so many questions Putting

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this sentence at the end of the first paragraph would

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end in kind of a jolt there What are the

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colony's contributing Just like a stone soup or something Is

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the proportion in terms of population size the golf handicap

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Maybe the essay never says leaving this sentence sticking out

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like a sore thumb So yeah it's got to be

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a no because just nowhere else mentioned that comes out

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of nowhere all right and lose around Just because this

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sense is vague does not mean it contradicts the main

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point of the first paragraph which is about the early

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days of money management in the colonies Likewise just because

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the sentence doesn't contradict the main point doesn't mean that

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ad's relevant information See goodbye infact it leaves us feeling

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like we have even less information since it raises new

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questions left unanswered Will the paragraphs are linked by criminology

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So adding information about colonies without any date makes the

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transition rougher not smother So yeah get rid of the

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right answers eh In the colonies Sorry just keeping it 00:01:45.539 --> [endTime] real You're not invited to this party

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