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Which is the best way to revise and combine sentences 1 and 2?
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Which of the following is best to insert at the beginning of sentence 8?
TSI Writing: Omitting Sentences to Improve Clarity 5 Views
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Which sentence in paragraph two should be omitted for clarity?
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Okay kfc writing people Here we go We've got another
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paragraph for you it's critical to understand how to properly
- 00:10
dispose of and recycle electronic kiosks available Mp three players
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boy was written a long time ago And flex your
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man If you ready sally and i am approximately seventy
Full Transcript
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percent of the vices Second line bubble block questioned which
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sentence in paragraph two should be omitted for clarity Let's
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go down to two Here it starts with sentence Nine
- 00:34
here from your lecture to prise your team ramona children
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any charge and batteries recycling all times Batteries have their
- 00:39
pollution start by checking with your local government or recycling
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People love a block Automotive stores will often collect and
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recycle wet cell batteries all right many municipalities over boxing
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recycling Well sometimes too much information can be confusing We
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don't want to gorge on information stuffed into a paragraph
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right Feeling bloated with too many facts makes readers pranking
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irritable plus a defective cholesterol so keep it in paragraph
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Lean and mean helps get the point across quickly and
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clearly we don't need a sentence that talked to specifically
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in a paragraph that points to a general set of
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information elements The automotive wet cell battery recycling option and
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since twelve is way too specific and it comes in
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between two sentences that discussed local government and eunice apple
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recycling programs So the answer here is c twelve that's
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the one that khun go to jenny craig and died
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