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TSI Writing: Omitting Sentences to Improve Clarity 5 Views


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Which sentence in paragraph two should be omitted for clarity?


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Okay kfc writing people Here we go We've got another

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paragraph for you it's critical to understand how to properly

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dispose of and recycle electronic kiosks available Mp three players

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boy was written a long time ago And flex your

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man If you ready sally and i am approximately seventy

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percent of the vices Second line bubble block questioned which

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sentence in paragraph two should be omitted for clarity Let's

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go down to two Here it starts with sentence Nine

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here from your lecture to prise your team ramona children

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any charge and batteries recycling all times Batteries have their

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pollution start by checking with your local government or recycling

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People love a block Automotive stores will often collect and

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recycle wet cell batteries all right many municipalities over boxing

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recycling Well sometimes too much information can be confusing We

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don't want to gorge on information stuffed into a paragraph

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right Feeling bloated with too many facts makes readers pranking

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irritable plus a defective cholesterol so keep it in paragraph

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Lean and mean helps get the point across quickly and

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clearly we don't need a sentence that talked to specifically

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in a paragraph that points to a general set of

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information elements The automotive wet cell battery recycling option and

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since twelve is way too specific and it comes in

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between two sentences that discussed local government and eunice apple

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recycling programs So the answer here is c twelve that's

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the one that khun go to jenny craig and died

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down and the rest are all wrong So that's a 00:01:37.119 --> [endTime] ditzy were shmoop

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